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1. The_1_andonly_Ceiling_Fan on Chapter 1 Tue 11 Nov 2025 07:22PM UTC

   

   Lowk fire 😼
   You forgot to correct yourself in some places with Two Time's pronouns, other than that it's really good!!!

   My attention span isn't the best so I gotta read it fast and leave out a few things 😿

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2. 1. Callisto_Silverlight on Chapter 1 Tue 11 Nov 2025 07:24PM UTC

      

      Oh I forgot? I will try to see and rewrite.

      And thank you for liking it<3

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   2. 1. The_1_andonly_Ceiling_Fan on Chapter 1 Tue 11 Nov 2025 07:25PM UTC

         

         Yea, in some sentences you switched between he and they ^^

         :D

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      2. 1. Callisto_Silverlight on Chapter 1 Wed 12 Nov 2025 09:22AM UTC

            

            Can you see now if it has any switches??

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