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  1. DarkSideOfGlass on Chapter 1 Sat 29 Nov 2025 05:06AM UTC

    This first chapter is intense from the very first lines. The slow return of Eileen’s consciousness is written in a way that makes the reader feel every bit of her confusion and fear. I liked how the worldbuilding was woven into her point of view.

    Severus’s introduction was very well done. His hesitation, his guilt, and his moral conflict came through clearly. I appreciated that he wasn’t immediately heroic. It made sense for his age and his place in this world. The moment where Eileen remembers her mum’s wand was a heartbreaking detail, and her plea for help hit hard. The ending was strong. The sudden shift from fragile connection to Stupefy showed exactly how powerless Eileen is in this situation and how trapped Severus is too.

    I’m excited to read more!

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    1. Kativating on Chapter 1 Tue 02 Dec 2025 11:06PM UTC

      Thank you so much for reading! 😺

      I'm so glad you like the intensity of this fic. As readers, we've been very familiar with the Wizarding World since we were children (or at least me...because I'm old 😹), so I wanted to show how anxiety-inducing it would be to be thrown into the worst parts of this universe without any previous knowledge.

      I'm happy you like Severus' introduction and characterization in the story. He is at a very tumultuous point in his life and he is about to hit a moral precipice, but isn't quite there yet.

      I'm excited to know your thoughts as you continue reading (as you are one of my fave HP writers.) Here is your sneak peek for the next chapter 👩🏻‍🦰⛓️🧙🧙‍♂️💰

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