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  1. DelicateSituation (orphan_account) on Chapter 7 Sun 04 Feb 2024 07:31PM UTC

    You put a lot of love into that comment, so let me respond to it.

    I admit I look at and absorb feedback. I go through varying phases of openness to persuasion, depending on how much momentum I already have going.

    But at all times, maybe to the point of pathology, I am ready/able to change my mind about my own work. When everything is going well, this helps me write with a sense of playful experimentation.

    In the case of ‘Camila’ (original version), I built up TOO much momentum. I was not prepared for how confident I would feel working in the ‘wholesome’ vein. I got cocky. I overcommitted to an experimental plot choice, something I thought might be a fun subversion of expectations. It was fun, and it was a subversion, but it also killed the vibe.

    People commented and in at least one case unbookmarked accordingly. This was easy to understand. It didn’t hurt my feelings. And it did somewhat temper my focus on trying to really stick the landing. And while I think I’d be hard pressed to find any glaring problems with the way these characters react to their changing circumstances, the one big problem I ultimately had to face was: I, and a number of readers, agreed that the plot had lost its charm.

    I was literally muttering to myself in the shower at one point. “Mom can’t find out. They can’t be found out.” Berating myself. Feeling that sunk cost remorse of ‘Oof, but I committed SO much time and energy to the mom-finds-out plotline!’

    Most often, I would leave the story as is. Write it off as another near miss. Try harder next time.

    But Gael and his sister are special. So is their snowbound house. So are the time and place that they inhabit. I meant what I’ve said elsewhere, I love G and C’s story too much to let it be one more failed experiment. Call it the power of true love, but these two successfully persuaded me - their God and maker - to grant them a do-over. Aesop be damned.

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    1. Rb (Guest) on Chapter 7 Sun 04 Feb 2024 09:02PM UTC

      Does that mean you are going to cut out mom and her lending panties? Also is there anything erotic going to happen between Mom and son ? Really need to know....

      Also I'm a fan of your writing, it's brilliant. There are very few stories that I read that felt so real and Hot.....
      Love it..

      Please respond 🙏🏻

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      1. DelicateSituation (orphan_account) on Chapter 7 Sun 04 Feb 2024 09:29PM UTC

        No spoilers. But thank you.

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        1. Rb (Guest) on Chapter 7 Sun 04 Feb 2024 09:51PM UTC

          YOU RESPONDED!!!! 🤩🤩

          I'll take that as a yes tho 😝

          I literally read you story and now am waiting for invitation to make make my account and bookmark it 😭😭

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