This was SO GOOD! I'm honestly going a bit feral. You've really nailed Bellas inner voice. I was surprised by how harsh Alice was being but if the Cullens are supposed to be more openly bad in this rewrite then it's spot on. Absolutely amazing overall. I will be anxiously awaiting the next chapter to see if Bella is just gonna sprint off in the middle of the ceremony a la Runaway Bride.
EEE thank you!! I was hoping I got her voice right, have read the books so many times so I feel I have absorbed her enough. Jake too I’m excited to do some Jake POV 👀 and yes, the Cullens are going to be amped up a bit more negatively and to be shown as manipulative. Honestly when I was skimming through the real BD to write this, this is the tone of Alice I got and I just ran with it. Im so happy you liked it and your comment motivated me to get back to writing! Hoping Ch 2 will be up sometime in the next few days.
I would be so FREAKING excited to see some of the story from Jake's perspective
Bella and Jake's interactions so far have been insanely cute and feel accurate to their banter from New Moon.
I'll keep an eye out for an update (-;
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