The lingering touches, the kiss to the hand, the meaningful gift!! Arthur and MC not correcting the man when he calls them a couple!!! The constant roasting of Uncle! Mary-Beth, Karen, and Tilly all being absolute icons!!!
“And they were supposed to spend the day together” ｡ﾟ(ﾟ´Д｀ﾟ)ﾟ｡
“He was completely gone for the woman sitting in front of him, and there was nothing he could do, or want to do, to stop it.” YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES!!!
Ahhhhhhhhhhh!!!
This chapter had me giggling and kicking my feet frfr!!!! Oh my god I loved everything about it!!!!!!!
Also this isn’t a typo I noticed (I didn’t notice any typos when reading this chapter ) but as an author who also really appreciates people pointing out any errors in their writing (and you are under absolutely zero pressure to do anything about this if you don’t want to this is just a friendly recommendation that you can ignore if you want to!) I think the part of this sentence “He was wearing a faded, royal blue striped collared shirt with the top few buttons undone, his black bandana around his neck tied in his front draped in front of his opened collar” where you describe how the bandana sits is a bit confusing to read. It makes sense but is a bit like a mental tongue twister to read IMO. Maybe changing it to something like “he was wearing a faded, royal blue stripped collared shirt with the top few buttons undone and his black Bandana tied around his neck to sit in front of his open shirt collar”
Again this is just a suggestion and you don’t have to do this at all! I just think it might help the flow a bit!!! But it’s totally and completely up to you!
Thank you so much for all your hard work writing this!!! I look forward to reading more!!!
ILYSM!!!!!! ╰(*´︶`*)╯♡
(Also please let me know if you feel my recommendation was over stepping or anything and I will not leave any in the future!!! The last thing I want to do is make you uncomfortable or unhappy! I just want to show as much support for you as possible! :) )
(I came back to edit my comment because I almost forgot to mention!!) AHHHHHHHHHH I LOVE HOW ARTHUR CALLS MC DARLIN’!!!!!! MY HEART MELTS EVERYTIME (an extremely personal bias and darling is one of my absolute favourite terms of endearment ｡ﾟ(ﾟ´Д｀ﾟ)ﾟ｡). THEY ARE SO GODDAMN CUTE!!!!
OHHH YES OMG— I PUT “FRONT” TWICE PLS😭😭 Thank you so much for pointing that out— I really appreciate it!! I fixed it— sometimes I write when it’s like 4 am and I space out in between sentences so I always forget I already detailed something 😭 like I legit put “she put the bowl of water down, smiling lightly and putting the bowl of water down.” at some point cause I just don’t notice so I truly appreciate you telling me!!
No worries on the correction— I genuinely appreciate it! I’d love if you pointed out stuff like that in my future chapters as well, it’d really help me when I don’t catch them!
IM SO GLAD YOU LIKE THE CHAPTER LOVELY ILY 😭❤️ I’m really grateful for your support and kind comments!! :D Next chapter will hopefully be done in a week or two!!
I totally get what you mean about the repeating stuff in sentences XD I do it in my own writing when I should definitely be getting sleep instead of being hunched over my laptop!!
And deadass if you ever want a beta reader hit me up!! <3
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